My story is tragic but not sad so don’t feel bad for me. I
did this to myself. When I was only 18 years old my best friend Ronnie told me
“Carl you got to try this man.”
Not knowing what I was getting myself into but not caring at
all I decided to go to ahead and do it. He passed me something what seem to
look like a stick with smoke coming out of it. He looked at me and nodded his
head asking me to take it. So I did. “What do I have to do?’ I asked looking at
it. “Man u funny.” He said with a historical laugh as if it was the funniest
thing in the world. “All you have to do is out your lips to it and kind of sip
it like it’s a Sippy cup.” I start to place it to my lips and it sipped it. I
the most horrifying cough ever but once I stopped I felt like I was in heaven. I
did it again and again not I can see why Ronnie was so happy. It felt like
nothing in the world can take my happiness away.
After of ten years of doing what you call weed I got bored
of it and wanted to try something new. Looking around town asking people this
man looked at me and told me “I think I have what your looking for.” Wasting no
time I followed him to a black van he handed me a big bag of what seemed to be
cocaine. “How much?” “300 bucks.” “I
don’t have that kind of money.” “Well you got to do something if you want this
man. I had to think to myself about what
I was going to do. Ill gives you my living room chair. The strange man looked
at me and raised his eyebrow. I think we can make a deal. I looked at him
confused and asked what kind of deal? Ill gives you the stuff but it depends on
how good the chair looked. Ok I said with convenience.
Drugs. Big topic. Classic weed gateway start, into the harder stuff. I like the progression of the story. It tells a definitive story. It tells a REAL story, too. The story is great, though I think you could develop the main character further. Think about it, addiction is something huge to work with. Inside the mind of a drug addict? There's a lot of stuff you could touch on, potentially! I must warn you to beware of spelling, grammar, and punctuation mishaps. Proofreading always helps, even having another set of eyes read your work. That seemingly "minor" stuff is important, because those mistakes can take away from a really great story. Know what I mean? Anytime you want to go through an excellent story of yours, but need help with the little stuff, ask me. I'm pretty good at that kind of thing. Keep the good work coming, it's awesome.
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